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Post by Ace on Feb 23, 2007 0:47:59 GMT -5
This was mentioned her before and recently brought up on the RS IMDB Board. There are a few scripts kicking about (some for sale) of unfilmed episodes and earlier versions of filmed episodes. This is the list I know of such scripts (if there are any corrections or additions please chime in) * An Offer You Couldn't Steele (early draft of Blood Is Thicker Than Steele) * Memory of Steele (early draft of Woman of Steele) * And Then There Was Steele (early draft of Steele Eligible) * Made in Bulgaria (early draft of Steele Threads) * I've Grown Acustomed to Her Steele * Steeled for the Kill * Steele Clad Alibi This one was on the net a few years ago and I've put it up again (reformatted, I think for easier reading) to download for those that didn't snag it: Steele Clad Alibi |
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Post by farouhkina on Feb 23, 2007 7:53:46 GMT -5
The link doesn't work
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Post by Ace on Feb 23, 2007 13:59:33 GMT -5
Oops, it had an extra url bracket in it. Right click and save and you should be able to download it. It's an RTF file that will open in Word.
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Post by judithmoose on Feb 25, 2007 2:09:46 GMT -5
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Post by Ace on Feb 25, 2007 2:41:54 GMT -5
Thank you Judith! And you too -- on the weekend.  |
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Post by Ace on Feb 25, 2007 12:50:36 GMT -5
Has anyone else read Memory of Steele yet? If so I'd like to discuss it.
Beware Spoilers though I try to be rather general
In many ways I preferred it to the final script. The horrid country bar bit is gone and I prefer this plan Anna has to the one in Woman, it makes her a little less the cardboard villianess, and I also think here Steele and Laura both come off looking slightly better - he less clueless and her less strident.
The way Anna disappeared 3 years ago and why Steele feels such guilt and why it's affecting him now (it's not just about lost love) is also better handled. And interesting that it's 3 years just one year before he shows up as Steele. And that "Goodbye Remington Steele" line here actually makes more sense and feels less like a clunker
I loved the unfolding of the "Help me" scene though I miss the kissing scene with Steele and Laura (though the lack of that makes the next day's behavior better) I don't think the stuff with Laura and Mildred and what Laura reveals to Mildred though rings as true. Though the entire purse scene, Laura's reaction and what the audience thinks just happened I think works very well. The ending tag in the show works better -- it's more subtle and intimate and more in tune with the nature of the relationship and how they talk to one another.
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Post by londonstreet on Feb 25, 2007 14:53:25 GMT -5
Me too, I prefer it to Woman of Steele, even if I miss the kiss scene quite a lot.
Remington's and Laura's feelings are described in a better way, I can feel what they're feeling. Remington seems more confused and his reaction to the reappearance of Anna seems more true, and Laura shows in a stronger way how much she cares for him.
I must agree with you Ace about the dialogues between Mildred and Laura, to me it seems there's something missing. But I really love Laura breaking thinking Anna's winning on both sides: she could have taken the tape and so Laura can't show Remington who's the real Anna and spending the night with Remington she gave him what he's been wanting for years from Laura.
I love Laura going to Remington's flat and going to Anna's home to speak with her and say "Leave him alone", actually I like their dialogue a lot.
The line "Help me" is wonderful and so is Laura reaction "I don't know how", it's so Laura.
I must agree with you, Ace, the ending seems more in line with the characters, but I must say I'd have preferred it to be in a more intimate place.
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Post by farouhkina on Feb 26, 2007 3:16:15 GMT -5
I also think this version is far much better than "Woman of Steele". Anyway, thank you very much Judith for posting this.
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Post by judithmoose on Mar 2, 2007 1:32:17 GMT -5
Just wait... Next week's installments will be "And Then There Was Steele" and "Made In Bulgaria". I'm also having lunch with Michael Gleason this weekend so I'll ask him if there are any unfilmed spec scripts still floating around in his storage area.
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Post by laura on Mar 2, 2007 2:27:51 GMT -5
Oh my, thank you Judy, you really spoil us  !!!!!! |
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Post by susan on Mar 2, 2007 13:12:02 GMT -5
Oh yes, what a blessing for us!
Thank you so much!
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Post by judithmoose on Mar 6, 2007 19:29:19 GMT -5
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Post by Ace on Mar 6, 2007 19:55:31 GMT -5
Thanks so much Judith! I'm downloading as I type. |
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Post by IcyCalm on Mar 6, 2007 23:06:16 GMT -5
I don't think Pierce liked "Made in Bulgaria." Those are his notes, because that is his handwriting, on the title page. Can't make out the first bit, but here's what I read:
L [Laura] badly written.
Does PB [me] take over?
L and R [Laura and Remington] don't work.
Now I'm going to read it to see if I concur. I don't know whose handwriting that is along the right side, nor can I read any of it.
IcyCalm
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Post by farouhkina on Mar 7, 2007 12:08:40 GMT -5
Oh my God! I absolutly love the original version of "steele elegible". If the aired episode had been like this, we probably would be talking about our favourite episode. Remington and Laura are so close, and there are so many love scenes (which we adore). I have really enjoyed reading the original script. Thank you ver much for posting it.
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Post by Ace on Mar 9, 2007 17:29:45 GMT -5
There are some things I like in the original version -- how Steele broke his arm and leg, the walk outside when he did break his leg. I love the stuff with Laura taking care of him and he being the patient from hell after she convinces him he should ask for things and then he never stops.
But Laura saying "I Love You" is completely the wrong dialogue. She never said those words before and I doubt if she did that would be the first occasion. The dialogue around the woman's militant feminist group also seems very off -- specifically dialogue by Laura that women would never kill in this way (seems not only sexist but very unrealistic for anyone that's studied crime) I think the actual script for the investigation and the people involved is tighter in the aired episode.
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Post by Lauryn on Mar 22, 2007 15:52:06 GMT -5
I seem to have missed some old threads. Maybe it's not too late to dredge this one up.
I haven't read through most of the "rogue" script yet but I had to go run and check when I heard Laura had said those three little words in whatever context. Egads, it's not just that she says them at this point in the relationship -- or even if it were much later for that matter but the whole Twilight Zone alternate reality of the dialogue:
Laura: "She's the Editor of LA Upbeat Magazine. They're doing a big article called the Ten Most Eligible Bachelors in Los Angeles. They wanted you to be in it but I figured that you wouldn't want to be so I told them it was OK and I told them all about you. So you're in it and I hope it's good for business because that's why I did it and please don't be mad and I love you."
"Please don't be mad and I love you"?? The awful bangs they gave her in the fifth season notwithstanding, when did Laura turn into Lucy Ricardo? Next she'll be swooping down on the bachelors for autographs. And stamping her feet because they don't include her in the photo shoot, LOL!
The corresponding scene in "Steele Eligible" is so infinitely more in character, with Laura grudgingly submitting to the tacky glitz of the affair for the publicity it gives the agency and Steele soaking up the adulation like he would the sun on the Riviera, not just because he enjoys it but because he knows how it would all get under Laura's skin. I love how he teases her with the possibility that he might get some "casual meaningless sex" out of the deal.
Funny how in the rogue script there's this bribe of hers:
Laura: Later when I surprise you by letting you take me home. When I surprise you by inviting you in..surprise, we get comfortable.. surprise, I loosen your tie and warm your cognac .. and then surprise ...
If only, if only, she'd finally come to her senses and was giving him a preview of the foreplay before the main event ... but never fear, unless the next three plus years are an hallucination this probably ends with
Surprise ... you get a peck on the cheek and a wave bye-bye.
Really, unless the writer was penning an alt-universe story and one that really hit the fast forward button on the relationship one can see why they had to strike this bit. This dialogue and scenario had to go nowhere. How, with any conscience, could Laura ply him with this sort of obvious come-on when they had so many years of sexual stone walling dead ahead? We've sometimes asked this question before, but I don't think the "what comes next" tease has ever been quite so obvious.
The rogue script does seem to jump the gun on the intimacy level. I wonder if there was ever any talk as early as season two about Laura and Steele making that leap? Probably not seriously and it ended up being resoundingly scotched, like that dialogue was.
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Post by Ace on Mar 22, 2007 16:28:56 GMT -5
 Never too late. And yes that entire paragraph leading up to "I love you" is a clunker -- in terms of writing and characterization. "Please don't be mad at me?" This from the woman who can't even choke out the words "I'm sorry". *snort* Mr. Steele hoping he might be subjected to "casual meaningless sex" -- he had to know it would all end up with him flat on his back -- with two broken legs.  Yes it does jump the gun on the intimacy level. And I think this was done quite a few times in earlier drafts of scripts though not to this extent (or as ham handedly) . When you look through the scripts and see the things deleted from the filming script it's often because a line is too intimate -- or it reveals too much and pushes the issue where the other party would have to do something or acknowledge something instead of the usual sweep it under the carpet and subtext and ignore it. It looks like the writers would often try and advance the relationship in what would be a logical manner but it would be pulled back in editing so it fit in the longer arc of not-so-fast-buddy. Ace
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Post by Lauryn on Mar 22, 2007 16:58:44 GMT -5
Ham-handedly. That was the word I was really searching for. I realize this was an early draft, but the misreading of the characters was really striking.
Really, the textbook definition of too much, too soon, without some earlier on screen progression with the characters. The implication with that "surprise" bit was so obvious that they would have to take it somewhere, and no one on the top ladder of the production was ready to push that envelope even if they'd laid in more of the groundwork.
It's sort of peversely funny to imagine writers who might be champing at the bit, being brought up short and having to say, "oops, didn't mean it." "A typo, honest! I wrote socks into the dialogue, not sex!"
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Post by sparklingblue on Mar 22, 2007 18:03:46 GMT -5
I haven't read this rogue script yet, but the dialogue snippet above is stuff you usually only get in some pieces of fanfiction. I'm sure the authors (fanfiction and script alike) mean well, but it still makes me cringe. Hearing declarations of love from either Steele of Laura would always strike me as odd. LOL Sometimes though there are lines in the script that come very close to saying it, just not in those words. The delivery of the line seems to have that effect. Like for instance in Diced Steele, when Steele causes Laura's sudden love for gambling "appealingly human". |
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